Research samples
Follow MLA formatting guidelines. See orange sheet, blue research guide or on-line version on Walton site.
Sample Preliminary/ working outline
T.J. Murphy
Mrs. Murphy
Honors American Lit 111B
12 March 2007
An Unhealthy Balance: Deterioration of the Mind in “The Fall of the House of Usher”
Thesis: In “The Fall of the House of Usher,” Edgar Allan Poe uses symbolism to reflect his theme that man inherently possesses a dual nature and that a physical or emotional imbalance in that nature deteriorates both his character and his sanity.
I. Roderick and Madeline Usher as twins symbolize the inseperable…
II. The symbolism of Roderick alone is …..
III. The house of Usher acts as a personified character
IV. The symbolism of the irreparable fissure in the house of Usher foreshadows the twins’ demise.
Essay Titles
1. The title of your essay is not the same as the title of the work.
Incorrect: Romeo and Juliet
Better: Romeo and Juliet: Victims of Fate or Fools of Free Will?
2. The title of your essay is not a label.
Incorrect: Romeo and Juliet Essay
Incorrect: Light and Dark Imagery
Better: Sunshine and Shadow in Romeo and Juliet
3. The title of an essay is not a sentence.
Incorrect: Fate Plays an Important Role in Romeo and Juliet
Better: Fate versus Free Will in Romeo and Juliet
4. The title of your essay should be clear and specific.
Incorrect: Romeo and Juliet Essay
Incorrect: Character in Romeo and Juliet
Better: Friar Laurence: Sage or Stumbler
5. Follow the rules of capitalization and punctuation.
· Do not underline, place in quotes, or italicize your essay title.
· Capitalize the first and last words of a title plus all words in between except for articles (a, an, the), short prepositions (to, of), and coordinating conjunctions (and, but, or). Capitalize prepositions that are five or more letters (Between, Across).
· Underline or Italicize the title of novels and plays if they are use in the title of your essay.
Example: Rochester
· Place the titles of short stories, poems and essays in quotation marks if they are used in your title.
Examples: Ambiguity in Frost’s “Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening”
The Introductory Paragraph
Introductory Paragraphs should include the following:
· A “hook” to grab the reader.
· An introduction to the topic (including title of work(s) and author(s) for literary analysis).
· A brief explanation of the topic. This may involve very brief plot summary.
· A bridge sentence or two to ease the reader from the overview of the topic to the specific point to be demonstrated.
· A thesis statement (the specific point(s) to be “proved”).
How NOT to begin an essay:
· Place Holder: Broad, generic statement that lacks focus.
Example: Great literature provides a window to another world; it enables readers to travel to a different time and different place and experience events and emotions they might otherwise not be able to know.
· Webster’s Dictionary: Define a key word and proceed from there.
Example: Webster’s New Collegiate Dictionary defines “fate” as “that which is destined or decreed.”
· Dawn of man introduction: A broad, sweeping statement about the topic since the beginning of mankind.
Example: Mankind has long sought to understand the nature and power of love.
· Book report introduction: beginning with the title, author and a general comment about the work
Example: In Romeo and Juliet William Shakespeare presents the tragic story of star-crossed lovers challenging both fate and the conventions of the time.
· Sweeping generalizations: grandiose statements making sweeping generalizations about the work
Example: William Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet is one of the most famous and widely-read plays of all time.
· Rush to write introduction: jumping right in to the paper without providing an introduction to the topic
Example: Prince Escalus’s three appearances dramatically alter the course of Romeo and Juliet.
How TO begin an essay:
The key to a good introduction is to be informative and thought-provoking and to make your material relevant to your audience. Ways to do this include the following.
· General Discussion: Explain in general terms how your topic relates to society as a whole. For example, on the theme of the inevitability of the corruption of innocence, you might start with something like, “At some point in life, everyone experiences that moment where he can feel himself beginning to change, the moment when he knows that the carefree days of youth have been left behind.” Continue to relate that scenario to society as a whole; then gradually lead into your novel, ending with a more specific thesis statement.
· Quotations: Begin your introduction with a meaningful, philosophical, or inspirational quote that enhances your overall point. Make sure that your quote is by an author different from the author of your novel or any of the sources you use in the paper: the idea is to get an alternative perspective on your topic. For instance, if your topic is that the search for self-identity is essential to humankind, you might use J. R. R. Tolkein’s quote, “Not all who wander are lost.” Elaborate on the universal relevance of your quote and relate it to the ideas in your paper; then end with a specific thesis.
· History / Biography / Statistics: Some topics lend themselves to “real world” backdrops. In this case, you might want to use facts to prove the relevance to the reader. For example, if your novel is highly autobiographical, you might want to include several pertinent facts about the author’s life and then show how these facts relate to the theme. If your topic is related to abuse, you could use current statistics about abuse in America
· Imaginary / Hypothetical Scenario: Use strong sensory imagery and somewhat hypothetical scenarios to pull at the “heart strings” of your reader. Create a mental picture for the reader in the first few sentences of your paper that will stay with him/her throughout. For instance, if you are writing on the myth of idealistic heroism in war, you might begin like this: “The eighteen-year-old soldier crouches in the muddy ditch in the middle of the night, all senses alert and ready for anything. His best friend and platoon mate tries to hide his paralyzing fears by joking about what their mothers would think if they saw how dirty they were. Neither one hears the imperceptible grenade that hurdles through the air and lands on one soldier’s leg, severing it immediately like a hot knife through butter.” You would then go on to relate this little story to your novel and eventually to your thesis.
· Definition: Sometimes the novel has a word or phrase that is key to the theme but is difficult to define. This is especially common in novels set in foreign cultures (The Joy Luck Club, All the Pretty Horses, The House of the Spirits, etc.). You can begin your introduction by defining that term, thus bringing the reader “into the loop” and relating it immediately to your topic.
· Rhetorical Question: Begin with a question or two that you will answer in your paper. This type of introduction can easily become trite; use with caution. For an example of this type of introduction, see the sample essay on page 16.
Introductory Paragraph and Exteneded Outline
Will Murphy
Mrs. Murphy
Honors American Lit
2 March 2006
Symbolism in “The Fall of the House of Usher”
“I became insane, with large intervals of horrible sanity,” wrote Edgar Allan Poe, the most famous of the anti-transcendentalists and the man recognized by many critics as the creator of the horror story (12). As for Poe’s own assessment of his mental health, the truths of his evaluation clearly shine through in his works: he blends the sane and the insane to create intense, horrifying tales. Among his many famous works, “The Fall of the House of Usher” stands as a monument to Poe’s stunning talent as an author; he constructs—piece by piece, crumbling stone by crumbling stone—a literal house of unseen fear. In this ghastly short story, Poe plays upon the anti-transcendentalist ideas that man contains a balance of good and evil and that self-knowledge is always limited. Like the weaver who winds thread in and out to create a multi-colored tapestry, Poe weaves enticing lines filled with symbolism, similes, and metaphors to demonstrate his beliefs. Each thread in the intricate storyline reveals a little more about the nature of the human character, and each end of a line leads the reader to conclusions within the farthest realm of surreal thought. In “The Fall of the House of Usher,” Poe uses symbolism to reflect his theme that man inherently possesses a dual nature and that a physical or emotional imbalance in that nature deteriorates both his character and his sanity.
I. Roderick and Madeline Usher are physical manifestations of the imbalance in man’s nature.
A. Roderick and Madeline Usher represent one being.
1. As Roderick Usher and the narrator entomb Madeline Usher after her death, the narrator comments, “A striking similitude between the brother and sister now first arrested my attention; and words from which I learned that the deceased and himself had been twins, and that sympathies of a scarcely intelligible nature had always existed between them” (Poe 319).
a. Roderick and Madeline Usher are physically alike.
b. They have a deep connection and understand each other with a comprehension that goes beyond normal thought.
2. The twins represent “one consciousness in two bodies” (Abel 381-382).
3. Though the twins symbolize one being, some critics suggest that they represent different facets of that being: Martha Womack, for example, states, “Roderick represents the mind or the intellect, while the portion of personality that we refer to as the sense (hearing, seeing, touching, tasting, and smelling) is represented by Madeline” (4).
a. Each twin represents part of a whole.
b. Their differences eventually cause the dissolution of the being, meaning the death of the two parts of that being.
B. Roderick’s own well-being relies on Madeline’s.
1. Much of the gloominess and illness of Roderick Usher can be attributed to the illness and approaching death of Madeline Usher, his only companion and last living relative (Poe 314).
a. As two parts that must work together to function, as Madeline deteriorates, she indirectly drags Usher down with her.
b. Usher, in trying to separate from Madeline and gain some semblance of independence, unwittingly brings about his own demise.
2. Madeline’s condition worsens; so does Roderick’s.
II. Through Madeline Usher’s symbolic death, Poe clearly suggests that man’s duality must be resolved or reconciled in order for him to survive.
(Obviously, this would be continued)
Intro paragraph:
For your intro, you need to relate your works to the literary period(s) in which they were written. Use this paragraph as a model, but, when in doubt, go for conciseness and clarity! Thesis last. Remember to use MLA format (TNR 12-point, double-space, header, margins, etc.)
Detailed outline:
A few tips to remember: 1. The detailed outline is an opportunity for you to organize your notes the way you think they should be ordered in your paper. If you did a good job taking notes, you don’t need to create anything new for this part of the research paper. 2. Nothing can stand by itself. You can’t have a I without a II, an A without a B, a 1 without a 2, an a without a b, etc. 3. Your outline should be in parallel structure. The easiest way to accomplish this is to use sentences for everything except the Roman numerals. The Roman numerals, however, should be in the same grammatical form. (They probably are if you did well on your preliminary outline, but double-check.)
Honors World Lit Research Paper Name ____________________
Research
An “A” (45-50) in research indicates that the writer did all of the following:
_____correctly used parenthetical documentation (all paraphrasing and direct quotes documented
correctly; documentation flows, introduced writer in first reference and used last names from then on, used names in lead-in or signal phrases, used “line” in first poem reference and numbers afterward, used backslashes between lines of poetry, etc. )
_____ included a Works Cited page that meets requirements, is in proper format, has all sources used
listed and all listed sources used
_____paraphrased in a way that represents the writer’s ideas accurately
_____used exact direct quotes
_____used a variety of lead-ins and blends for quotes
_____used an appropriate number of quotes and paraphrases to support ideas
_____used correct number and type of authoritative sources
_____used correct formatting: header, heading, page numbers, margins, font size, spacing, indents, etc.
_____highlighted sources
Content
An “A” (45-50) in content indicates that the writer did all of the following:
_____meets length requirement (percentage factor)
_____has an appropriate title
_____has an effective intro with a powerful grabber and a strong, approved, specific, significant thesis statement that is supported in the paper
_____has clear and relevant topic sentences and smooth transitions—every sentence relates to the previous and subsequent sentences
_____has good development of ideas with little (if any) deviation from topic
_____used source material appropriately
_____has a well-developed conclusion that rephrases thesis, returns to intro hook and says something new, states something significant about the topic in a broad sense, is not too specific for a conclusion
_____does not have unnecessary wordiness to “pad” paper
Grammar/mechanics/style (5 points off per error unless otherwise noted)
_____agreement errors (s/v, pronoun/antecedent, number)
_____comma splices, fragments, run-ons (-15 each)
_____diction (inappropriate, incorrect usage)
_____modifiers incorrectly used (dangling or misplaced)
_____parallel structure errors
_____passive voice used when active voice would suffice
_____person (other than third)
_____pronoun usage (unclear reference, incorrect cast)
_____proofreading (word, letter omissions, etc.)
_____spelling errors (includes capitalization, contractions, abbreviations, apostrophes, numbers, homonyms)
_____syntax that’s not varied, clear, correct
_____verb tense problems (inconsistent or does not adhere to literary present and historical past)
The total of the three parts will equal the research paper grade. ________________/100






